Bonjour , je veux juste savoir les fautes que j'ai fait sur mon dialogue . ( je préviens : je suis pas très forte en anglais ) Merci e- Oh ! You are on your pho
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Bonjour , je veux juste savoir les fautes que j'ai fait sur mon dialogue . ( je préviens : je suis pas très forte en anglais )
Merci
e- Oh ! You are on your phone again ! You must to stop it .
s-Non. I am just looking the socials networks for two minutes only .
e-But you are all the time on it .
s- no.
e- I think , it has a negative impact on you , right ?
s- Maybe ! But I am not all the time to using my mobile phone, the Internet or what ever ...
e- In my opinion , socials networks or new technology were your drugs
s-But your are on your phone too !And I think I can stop when I want .
e- Stop to lie !New technology was an essential part of your lifefor major of people .
s- I know , I feel maybe a certain frustation if I were deprived of all my gadjets.
e- You don't know how new technology addict you are . So I must to help you to stop that because you have a crave for this . So now if your are ok , I will taking your mobile phone for one week .
s- It is a really hard challenge !
Merci
e- Oh ! You are on your phone again ! You must to stop it .
s-Non. I am just looking the socials networks for two minutes only .
e-But you are all the time on it .
s- no.
e- I think , it has a negative impact on you , right ?
s- Maybe ! But I am not all the time to using my mobile phone, the Internet or what ever ...
e- In my opinion , socials networks or new technology were your drugs
s-But your are on your phone too !And I think I can stop when I want .
e- Stop to lie !New technology was an essential part of your lifefor major of people .
s- I know , I feel maybe a certain frustation if I were deprived of all my gadjets.
e- You don't know how new technology addict you are . So I must to help you to stop that because you have a crave for this . So now if your are ok , I will taking your mobile phone for one week .
s- It is a really hard challenge !
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1. Réponse ficanas06
Voilà quelques corrections d'un devoir d'un bon niveau pour une élève qui se déprécie à tort, me semble-t-il !
e- Oh ! You are on your phone again ! You must stop it !
s-Non. I am just looking to the socials networks for two minutes only .
e-But you spend all your time on it .
s- no, I don't
e- I think , it has a negative impact on you , right ?
s- Maybe ! But I am not always using my mobile phone, the Internet or anything else...
e- In my opinion , socials networks or new technology are your drugs
s-But your are on your phone too !And I think I can stop when I want .
e- Stop lying !New technology is an essential part of the life for most of people .
s- I know , I maybe feel a certain frustation if I am deprived of all my gadgets.
e- You don't know how a new technology addict you are . So I must help you to stop because you have a crave for this . So now if your are ok , I will taking off your mobile phone for one week .
s- It is a really hard challenge !